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近幾年,移民到海外的港人有幾十萬,當中有相當數目的學童,
我學生群中,就有已考了一次但不成功的學生,dream school 給的feedback是 writing and reading 只是average,要above average才行,所以他的父親找上我。
通常這類學生水平不會太差,
讓自己的文章脫穎而出的秘訣很多,
Example one
Student
Shells are both attractive in appearance and practical in usage.
My rewrite
Because I am so accustomed to associating shells with beauty – think Botticelli’s golden-haired Venus perching on a scallop shell as she bursts forth from the sea – I seldom remember shells serve a practical purpose too.
Example two
Student
She had a look of horror on her face.
My rewrite
It took me a moment to put my finger on why her display of dread looked so familiar: she was Munch’s figure in “The Scream,” her eyes bulging with fear as her lips contorted themselves into a perfect oval.
Watch this interview for more information on my approach to teaching English writing: https://youtu.be/aQbAsMMHPd8
Michelle Ng
英國牛津大學畢業,前《蘋果日報》和《眾新聞》專欄作家,現在身在楓葉國,心繫中國大陸和香港。
聯絡方式: michelleng.coach@proton.me
個人網站: https://michellengwritings.com
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