
今天,我們認為母親節買花給母親是再正常不過,
想作文拿高分,也可以考慮是否能「Say it with Numbers」,用數字把內容描繪得更深刻。想像一下,
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Many people in Hong Kong live in subdivided flats. This is because in my native city, property prices are extremely high and the income gap is very wide. So low income earners can’t find a decent place to live.
學生的問題,是假設英國老師已知道「subdivided flats」是怎麼一回事,雖然老師能大概猜到,但如果Say it with numbers,文章的衝擊力會完全不一樣:
My rewrite
In Hong Kong, 280,000 people – the equivalent of almost 3% of metro London’s population – live in flats that have been further divided into units, where each person has an average of 40 square feet of space, and where it is not uncommon for children to do homework while sitting hunched up on the top bunk of their beds. It is my native city’s eye-wateringly high property prices that condemn so many to so sorry an existence: in a place where the median monthly income is 1900 pounds, on average apartments sell for one million.
香港學生寫英文,其中一個要跨越的門檻,是能寫perfectly grammatical的文章的同時,也能寫出引人入勝的內容。 Say it with numbers的技巧容易掌握,
Michelle Ng
英國牛津大學畢業,前《蘋果日報》和《眾新聞》專欄作家,現在身在楓葉國,心繫中國大陸和香港。
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