在我的學生群當中， 有想把 Business English 學好的成年人，他們經常讓我想起王昭君。

根據傳說，王昭君之所以被選中和匈奴和親，是因漢元帝宮裏的畫師故意把她畫成長相普通的宮女（因她沒像其他妃嬪那樣賄賂他）。當匈奴到朝廷求親，漢元帝就選了王昭君，因他只從她的畫像認識她，沒見過她真人。

Almost always, 我學生的 Business English 和學生本人，跟王昭君和她的畫像一樣有出入。單看他們的 Business English，還以為他們思路紊亂，見他們本人，原來資歷和上進心俱全。可以想像，如果沒法寫一手好的Business English，要給素未謀面的人留好印象不容易。

我知道不少移了民的香港人要在英語國家重新建立事業不容易，以後我會在這個欄目也多談 Business English topics。

Below is my rewrite of a letter written by a job applicant who has failed to land on her dream job but still wishes to keep in touch with the company.

 

Original version:

Hope you are doing well. I heard from ABC (name of headhunter) that your company hired another person. I wish your organization every success in the future. It was an honour to meet you and your team.

I’m still interested in working for your company. Please inform me if there is an opening in the future.

Let’s keep in touch!

All the best,

 

My rewrite

I learned from ABC (headhunter) that an offer was made to another candidate.

Since I am of the opinion (especially after the interviews) that my skill set and work style are a good fit, do consider me again when a suitable opening arises. On my part, every now and then I’ll give you an update on my latest achievements.

I wish your company every success.

 

Michelle Ng

英國牛津大學畢業，前《蘋果日報》和《眾新聞》專欄作家，現在身在楓葉國，心繫中國大陸和香港。
聯絡方式： michelleng.coach@proton.me
個人網站： https://michellengwritings.com

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